Critique Essay of critique of "In Just"
Upon reading this essay critique I do note the essay is in five paragraph form. The writers tone is formal and easy to read. I am uncertain what the essay topic is about, I only know the title "In Just". Also, I don't see any thesis statement in this critique. There are no clear steps to follow that allows me to make sense of what I may be reading about. This essay may be easy to read, but not clear.
Through out the essay I notice a theme of constantly bringing up the thesis statement to the writer, that there is lack of a thesis, it is not strong. This is a global concern, however you don't give the writer any suggestions or examples of an appropriate thesis statement for this essay. Thesis seems to be the main focus of this essay critique, yet nothing concrete is addressed for the writer to refer back to.
The writer may get lost in the wordiness of the critique, as evidenced by the second and third paragraph are lengthy with redundant information. This is going to confuse the reader, I know it confused me! Again, more examples could be given for the global concern of the thesis statement, because with out the thesis statement there really is no essay.
Local strengths of this critique are strong. Consistent grammar ,diction and mechanics are used. There are some run on sentences in the third and fourth paragraphs, but over all it is nicely written. Repetition is also repeated at length with regards to a thesis statement. More effective critique would to give the writer more examples of what her thesis statement could look like, visual examples would help the write for future reference.
In conclusion, I feel this critique does let the writer know of her global concern needs to be focused on the thesis statement, but I am still left wondering what the essay was about and what was the initial thesis statement of the writer's essay to begin with. I am left with the impression that the writer who critiqued the original essay is knowledgeable, but just did not get the point across to the writer of the essay.
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