Revision Strategy Essay for Poem "Immigrants" by Pat Mora

                                             Revision Strategy Essay
                                                     "Immigrants"
                                                    By Pat Mora

 I have recently read the essay "Immigrants" by Pat Mora. My understanding of this essay is, immigrant parents want their young children to be raised with Americans culture, traditions while hiding ones true heritage from society. I feel the writers introduction and thesis is clear and to the point, I am able to read through the essay with ease. While reading this essay, I felt sad for the immigrant parents who felt ashamed of their heritage. The writers tone illustrated a picture in my mind that made me able to visualize the characters.

 American culture was made evident by "wrap their babies in the American Flag" (Mora 1) as well as giving the children American names "name them Bill and Daisy" ( Mora 3)  Again, this evidence is in clear, meaningful steps. The essay flows with organization and comes directly from the thesis statement. Global concerns are minimal, however, I do encourage the writer to use more rhetorical wording and more emphasis on words where needed.

Traditions are made vivid by the children playing with tangible items, American toys . "blonde dolls that blink blue eyes" (Mora 4-5) "football and tiny cleats for baby before he can even walk" This is a great example of drilling something into ones mind before he or she can make their own choice of do they even like dolls or football? The parents don't think of that, the toys are American, therefore, the children will play with them. More traditions are discussed, "eat apple pie and hot dogs" (Mora 6-7)

Again, I can read this essay with ease and get a true understanding of the parents desire to raise their children to be Americans. The parents  will hide their true heritage. "whisper in Spanish and Polish when babies sleep" (Mora 9-10) The parents have true fear that the children will not be liked if their true identity is exposed . Citation is well done and presents evidence of the parents concerns and sacrifices.
   

   In conclusion, this essay clearly illustrates immigrant parents desire to raise their babies as Americans. The immigrants desire to cloak their own heritage with Americanized traditions and cultures in hopes their children will be accepted by society. In final thoughts I feel the local concerns for this essay are minimal. MLA was followed, mechanics and grammar with minimal errors and diction was legible. I enjoyed reading this essay and could vividly see illustrations through the writers tone.